Ollie the Octopus - Meg McKay and Sarah Whitmore

Character: octopus
Plastic surgery
At cross roads
Glowing mirror

One day down in the sea there was a octopus called Ollie. He was a very nice octopus, he liked to swim around the ocean. He didn’t have any friends because they thought that he was ugly. He was not the usual octopus he had nine tentacles his eyes were like a humans and he had freakishly weird glasses. He was not the usual colour an octopus would be, he was bright green!!! He also attracted sharks because he glowed in the dark sea water. So he thought why doesn’t he get plastic surgery? So he drove in his yellow sumerin, yellow sumerin, yellow sumerine. He went past the shop, under the seaweed, over the sand castle, and through the cross roads. At the end of the swimming lane he saw the octo-clinic. He saw a big a big glowing mirror, glowing back at him. In the surgery room there were a lot of ig objects that he had never seen before. He was very nervous. He felt like running out when he saw the needle. They gave Ollie an injection. As soon as they gave him the injection he fell asleep. The doctors started tacking Ollies ninth leg off and putting false eyes instead of the humans eyes. They also took the glow out of him. He had to go back and forth to the octo- clinic for two weeks. Past the shop, under the seaweed, over the sand castle and through the cross roads, day after day. In the end he did not like his new self. Infact he hated himself, but everyone else loved his new look. They thought it was fab. So now Ollie has a lot of new friend s. He is very happy. But there is still one thing wrong……………….. he is GREEN!!!

Onaga Is Better Than "J Dog" - Jordan Scoullar-Lamb

THERE WERE 2 DRUNKS WALKING DOWN THE ROAD THEY WERE SO DRUNK THEY SEE 3 OF EVEYTHING THEN THEY SAW A CATAPULT IT LOOKED LIKE GIANT BEER THEY FELL IN THE CATAPULT THEY PULLED THE LEVER THEY WENT IN TO A SECRET GARDAN THEY DID NOT NO WHERE THEY WERE LOOKED AROUND NOTHING THEN ARCHEYS SHOT ARROWS WE WERE DOWN THEN WE GOT UP AND PULLED OUT AK47 IT WAS BAD THEN WE TOOK THERE BOW AND ARROWS AND WE WALK THOUGH THE GARDEN THEN THIS DRAGON CALLED ONAGA CAME AND THIS FIRE THING CALLED BLAZE HELP ONAGA THEN WE STARTED TO FIGHT WE PULLED OUT OUR SWORDS THEY WON WE JONED THERE TEAM WE WENT ON A JOUNRY THEN THE RED DRAGON CLAN CAME FIGHT!!!ROUND ONE! ONAGA BLAZE TAVEN DAGON WINS! THEN TWO SORCERERES COLUD QUIN SHE SHAG TSIM CAME ROUND ONE FIGHT!! ONAGA BLAZE TAVEN DAGON WINS FLAWISH WIN!!THEN JOURNY ENDED!!!

Piggy in the Middle - Natalie Paterson

Piggy in the middle
I have a huge family-just at home lets see there’s my mum Sharon, my step dad Mark, my 3 older brothers David, Alex and Josh, my 2 younger sisters Rosie and Kate and my step brother and sister Gemma and Max and me Anna I’m piggy in the middle Gemma Max and David call me piglet I hate it I hate Mark as well he and my mum are MARRIED now so we live with him he’s a train driver I have the best bedroom in the whole house all the way up at the top it has a very pretty stain glassed window well it used to and then David threw a cricket ball threw it so now it is broken. And what’s worse is that our house is –literally- in the middle of nowhere no neighbours or anything at least I can see through my window. My idea of a fantastic holiday is reading making things and sleeping well my stepfather Mark had better ideas he said we had to go camping so that’s what were doing right now going camping
At least there’s no bears or snakes or wolfs in Taupo that’s where were going. Oh fresh air felt sooo GOOD well that is after being in a car with 7 other people we had just gotten to the camping site and already Gemma was calling her friends, Max was calling his girlfriend, Rosie had a bleeding nose, Alex, Josh and David were fighting over who got to sleep in the middle and Katie had decided to become a cat so Mum an Mark were trying to get her down from a tree, me with nothing to do I decided to go in to the woods for something to do. I ran back to the campsite everybody was asleep they must of figured I had gone off exploring I had made a fantastic discovery-a pool! Not like Moana pool in Dunedin this was a big blue lagoon surrounded by palm trees I woke everybody up but they just told me to go away and that they were trying to sleep
Even though it was only 5 pm! But mum came out and asked me what was going on and I told her to change into her togs and follow me then I got changed and sure enough mum had her togs on then we ran off into the woods together “oooo it’s beautiful” mum exclaimed as she gingerly took tiny steps into the clear, sparkling water “it’s a hot spring” mum said in surprise then mum picked me up and whirled m around and at that moment everything seemed perfect.

The Talking Cat - Sean Brosnahan

A boy called Bob was on holiday in Egypt with his family and some friends. One day they were visiting a tomb. His parents went off to see another tomb but Bob and his friends decided to stay for a bit longer. They looked around for a bit longer but then his friends went off and the door slammed shut behind them. Bob was trapped. He sat down for a while, then all of a sudden a cat walked out and said “Wazzup” then Bob started running away. The cat said “I can help you get out”. “Ok” said Bob eagerly. So the cat showed him a stone that slid out so that he could crawl through and then he lived happily ever after til five minutes later when he walked off the cliff.

By Sean

War Hero - Alex Phillips

Alex’s Big Bad Fight
One day there was a guy called Alex he was a war hero and he had been to war many times and he was at a wedding at the tower of London then Tony walked in and started shooting people randomly after the fire of shooting some people stood up there was a kid with a rusty knife and he gave it to Alex to fight back Tony but then all the people that died came out of the body like ghosts and started to fight Tony. Tony had to run all the ghosts were to strong so Tony jumped out the window he broke his leg he was in hospital for 2 years and after he got out he wanted revenge on Alex He made my tourists attack go wrong and put me in hospital for 2 years later that day he whet to Alex house and set up a trap when Alex walked though the door the trap got set off and it fired shotgun bullets at Alex but Alex hade super coolness powers so he can make time slow down and stop time so he stopped time and pushed the bullets away and picked up the gun for the person who set the trap he looks in the living room but no one was there he looked in the TV room but none was there then he when in the bed room and Tony was jumping out the window Alex fires bullets randomly though the room one of them hits Tony’s…. Arm Tony still runs away Tony left a message on the answering machine beep
“Alex if can hear this you have past my test I won’t to finch this ones and for all we should meat at the park down by the lake” Alex got ready for tonight later that night they meat out side the park Tony came with a tank and Alex came with a helicopter
With mini-guns on the side of it and Tony fired a nuke at Alex and it missed and went all the way to wills house (ha-ha) then Alex fires the mini-guns at Tony but they miss and hits a ice-cream truck “No I love ice-cream I was going to buy some after I had killed you” “I don’t think so” Alex’s fires a nuke a Tony and he blows up.
Finally the war is over and goes home to go to bed
The end

Monkeys Don't Believe... - Mikaela Chettleburgh

Character- A small monkey
Setting- A wild life park
Object- A glowing mirror
Topic- Animals against humans

Once there was a small monkey called Joey who lived in a wild life park with all his monkey friends called… billy, holly, molly
And the king of all monkeys Geoff he was the boss of the whole wild life park. One-day lots of humans with cameras were coming towards us backwards and they looked at us. Then we looked beside us and there it was a glowing sliver pretty glowing mirror and Geoff said “ holy gobstopper” “what is that?” said Molly “ it is one of the most dearest mirrors in the WORLD!!!”Said Geoff. All the monkeys fainted but not Geoff because he was to busy trying to figure out a way to steal the beautiful mirror. When it was 12:00pmgeoff woke up all the monkeys in the wild life park and one big chimp to be the bodyguard to see if anyone was coming. So they went off quickly and broke out of the cage and then as they were walking someone was in a car and turned the lights on and blinded the monkeys. They turned around and ran back to the cage so they would not get caught. The manager jumped out of the blue and gave them a fright he went to pick them up through them into the cage and drove, them to the pound because the manager didn’t want them any more and the animals started to cry. But the manager didn’t care he just walked out the door and didn’t bother coming back. The monkeys and chimp got put into a cage and stared talking to other animals and started to make new friends. And they lived, happily ever after.

By Mikaela

The Deep Well - William Pelet

“Wow! Look, there is a well, I never knew it was there,” says Charlie. “Neither did I,” replies his best friend David who was going on a long bike ride with him. Charlie suddenly says, "when we arrive back home, I could ask my Mum if we can explore it.” David then commented sarcastically, “yeah right.”

When Charlie arrives home he asks his mother the question. Charlie’s mother of course said no, being an overly protective mother.

The next day Charlie is walking to school with David talking about the well. Charlie told David his mother had said no. David suggested, “we could sneak out at night.” Charlie replied, “maybe.”

Just when the school bell rang Charlie sent a note to David that read…. Be at the well at 1 am.

That night at 1:01 am Charlie was at the well waiting for David.

29 minutes later…..

David finally arrives. Charlie said in an angry voice, “ you are late by 30 minutes!” "Sorry, slept in a bit,” David replies.

Charlie pulls a rope and a torch out of his backpack. "David you go down first.” “No way you go down first!” Charlie replies, "David’s a chicken, pok pok pok !” David gives in with a sigh.

Charlie begins to lower in David who comments, "this feels like being in a giant snake." David suddenly hits the bottom. He yells, "pass the torch down!" Charlie throws the torch. Charlie immediately runs over to the nearest tree and ties the rope around so they can get back up. He starts to climb down.

At the bottom Charlie and David turn on the torch and start to explore. David who held the torch yelled, “look there is a secret passage way!” Charlie came running over. “Lets go exploring!" When they had walked down the passage way they entered a small room and saw an ivory tusk sitting on a small tower. David started to sprint over but Charlie yelled, “stop there might be bobby traps!”

Charlie picks up a small pebble that is in sight and chucks it at the ivory tusk which falls to the floor. Nothing happens, all is quiet. They run over and pick it up. “Awwwwesome!” They both say together.
They explore the room. Charlie yells excitedly. “Hey, look there is another secret passage, this could be our way home!"

They have been walking through the tunnel for ages. They finally see light and run full throttle towards it.

When they reached the end of the tunnel with the treasure safely in their backpack, they see a train. The driver shouted, “do you want a ride home?” Both Charlie and David were surprised and replied, “but we don’t have any tickets!” The driver then told them this is the last train home and it doesn’t really matter. David and Charlie hopped on board with a grateful thank you!

Written by William Pelet

Plastic Fantastic - Gemma Lowden

CHARACTER: Security guard
SETTING: Cross roads
OBJECT: Glowing mirror
TOPIC: Plastic surgery

One day there was a security guard called Billy he had an unfortunate looking face and he had always dreamt of having plastic surgery. One day he was walking down the hallway and a mirror appeared in front of him. It started talking to him and it said “what do you want most?” at first Billy thought that he was trying to be a gene but he wasn’t going to be rude so he said I really want plastic surgery then the mirror said meet me by the cross roads at noon and then he vanished. He had just got to the top of the road and he saw the mirror being carried up by a big scary masked man even though I am so puffed from walking up that big hill but I dig it in and sprint as fast as I can, finally I get there, he says “are you ready to leave all this ugliness behind?” “Yeah definitely!” I reply. He works his magic and oomph it felt like I just got hit on the head by a hammer, next thing was I woke up in a hospital ward I think in comes a nurse and introduces herself as Lillian, she asks me if I am ready for my operation I answer with a simple “yep” “ok off we go then,” she rolls me down the corridor and into the surgery room she carefully wipes my hand with some sort of numbing lotion, well I think that’s what it is. Now for the needle oh yuck, I feel a little pinch and then black the next thing I remember was waking up in the ward and grabbing the mirror that lies beside me “WOW I look great!” he shouted in comes Lillian the nurse and she says “oh my Billy you look great!” I thank her and she exclaims that ill be out of here by tomorrow. By the time I’m out I’ve lost my job and the only good thing I’ve got left is my house and dog bob. The end

The Talking Cat - Jordie Beres

Character: A talking cat

Object: A box

Topic deserted by his friends

Setting: An Egyptian tomb

Once upon a time there was a man called Mr Beres he was very interested in Egyptology he liked digging for ancient jelery from the year 1500. He had just booked tickets on a plane to Egypt. In the plane he borrowed a book on Egyptian tombs he read a section about treasure it said that ten steps forward from the temple of doom and if you dug 400 metres into the ground you would find a great treasure a box with the treasure inside Mr Beres badly wanted to find that treasure when he got his luggage he ran of and rented a dune buggy and raced of to the temple of doom he immediately stepped ten steps forward from the temple of doom and dug. About ten hours later he found this box from inside the box he thought he heard a voice from inside when he opened the box out sprang a talking cat. Mr Beres fainted when he woke up all he saw was this ginger cat with blue eyes sleeping on him the cat just said hello I’m a talking cat Iv been here for 5000 years I was deserted by my friends all because I told them there was treasure in the temple of doom he wanted all the treasure to himself so he buried me here in my sleep so he decided to adopt the cat he called him Boris and they lived happily ever after

The end

By Jordie Beres

Samurai Escape

Samaria Escape

It was a dark night in the dungeon the only light was a small flaming touch on the wall on the corner was a Samaria prisoner asleep suddenly he got up and rushed to the door and took out a small pouch in his pocket and put it on the door and picked up his weapons and the touch and threw it at the door BANG the door had exploded (the pouch was pitch)

The Samaria rushed threw the door and was meat buy a solider with a sword and shield the Samaria quickly manoeuvred his sword passed the sword and shield into the mans chest the solider let out a big scream and fell to the floor the Samaria herd foot steps and more soldiers ran the corner armed with crossbows the Samaria chucked two of his knives from his pack on his back into the soldiers they fell to the floor

The Samaria ran to the main gates and was met by a small army this was the only thing in his way from freedom this would be a hard task GET THE PRISNOR said the soldier they ran at the Samaria the Samaria ran at them there was a massive battle ahhhhhh offfff ekkkkkkk screamed the soldiers he had killed them all he was free.

CUSTARD

CUSTARD

I was the richest person in the world. I was rich because my mum and dad made custard. I help them. We make buckets full of custard. I am 14 years old and I am turning into a grown up. Mum and dad say I have to make custard when I grow up. But I don’t want to. We live in a mansion and we earn billons. I have my clothes made by special people. And the people who don’t work hard enough for us have to live in a damp dungeon . when they start to work hard they can live in our house again. But barely any one lives in the dungeon. When I have to go to school my best friend Mary will share some custard with me. She comes over everyday . she has a lot of money because they sell cars. We go to her house or we go to mine. Mary is the smartest in the class. I am the third smartest in the class. When I grow up I have to make custard lots and lots of custard. I am now 20 and we are still making custard. It is delicious. We are rich until we die and it all goes to the family and they can spend it on anything they want.

By Gabby

The drunk and the secret garden - Nathan Foley

The drunk and the secret garden

The drunk and the secret part 1

There was once a peaceful garden because it was secret there was deer prancing around birds chirping dolphins doing back flips out of the water and all the trees so green. That was until the drunk came along that is. I will tell you what happened that dreaded day. He was walking down the street he was drunk he saw a catapult and he thought it was a lazy boy so he sat down in the catapults holder he saw a beer bottle so he grabbed it but it wasn’t a beer bottle it was the leaver to fling fire the catapult. The drunk heard a click and went off with an ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hay I can see my house from here ahhhhhhhhhhhhh ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh oh no a golden eagle ouch get off get off! Ahh he’s gone oh no a plane oh no this s going to hurt owwwwwwwwcccccccccchhhhhh hello pilot said the drunk oh no he’s pressing oh no he is making the wheels come out oh no I’m slipping this is going to hurt ooooooooooooooooooooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwccccccccccccccccccccchhhhhhhhhhhhhh I’m going down good bye cruel cruel world!

THE DUNK AND THE SECRET GARDEN PART 2

Crash ouch hay I’m alive I’m alive! Woo look at this there’s deer and fish and ducks then the drunk slapped his legs and felt something in his pocket so he took it out it was a beer bottle the drunk said yahh so he popped the lid a sculled all the beer and did an huge burp then he was drunk than ever before he set a tree on fire and sat beside it the fire was like a rainbow except it was only red orange and yellow he found another beer but this time he didn’t drink it he threw it at the fire after a couple of seconds later there was a loud BANG!

The drunk was killed and half of the garden destroyed and that was the end of the secret garden

THE END

The Brown Parcel - Sammy Irvine

The Brown Parcel

Once there was a creepy reporter called Ralph. One day Ralph saw a brown parcel lying on the footpath. He picked it up, then he noticed a wide open door. He tiptoed inside and down a long windy staircase made of cold hard stone. When he got down he saw a hot flaming fire and a bookcase. Nobody was down there, he put down the brown parcel, then accidentally stepped on a copper coloured stone. The bookcase shifted aside and a long passage seemed to be behind. Ralph picked up the parcel and hurried inside. The passage wasn’t as long as Ralph thought, it took about three meters and Ralph was at a rugged looking mountain pass, he thought to himself, how did I get here? ‘of course, the secret passage!.’ All of a sudden, a strong wind blew and knocked the parcel out of Ralph’s hands ‘Nooo!’ he screamed, as he staggered up the mountain pass, wind blowing in his face, he saw the parcel lying on a nearby rock, not to far down. He thought he could reach it, but lost his balance and tumbled down the mountain and that was the end of Ralph, the creepy reporter.

Rory Harvey - Little Red Space Ace

LITTLE RED SPACE ACE

ONCEUPON A TIME THERE WAS A GIRL CALLED LITTLE RED SPACE ACE. One day her mum asked if she would take the space fries and nebula burgers too her grandmas ok said little red space ace be careful said her mum jumped in her 400,000,000,000 snail power engine shiny red mothership as she went in the coffee machine churned out some
Decaf coffee and space ace got drunk on it and crashed her ship meanwhile a local bully zorg who feasted on humans was enjoying a drink in his favourite bar the zoggs head he was a mercenary and feasted on humans every human he ate got him 100,000,000 zollars he got a call on his comlink it said that a human had crashed there ship in the area the zorg grunted and headed off. Space ace woke up and saw a drink driving kills ouch I still feel tipsy better stay away from the drink for a while just then the zorg rounded the corner and snorted through his translator hello human hi said space ace ok lets cut to the chase where you going to my grannies not that its any business of yours realising she was threatened she used her black belt in karate to knock the stuffing out of him after there encounter a squirrel could have creamed it but luckily a card fell out of her pocket when she was fighting he reached out as if every inch pained him and snatched it he read the address a grin came over his face and he got up slowly and rushed off as quickly as possible as it is to be while you are practically unconscious. Mean while space ace fixed the ship with her fixing ships for dummies book she got in her ship and started flying to grannies. The zorg flew in his i.f.z.(identified flying zorg) to the address on the card but zorgs cant read well so he got next doors house instead ate the old lady in there and picked some clothes he liked and waited he saw space ace realised his mistake and watched as space ace landed deployed the landing ramp and saw her slip on the ramp fall and knock herself out. He quickly swallowed the granny in the house biting her head off while he was at it and got into the four-poster bed and pretended to be a granny space ace woke up (again) and stared at the house so she got up grabbed her basket and walked into the house oh my what big eyes you have all the better to see you with my dear but came out as hfgrgvrggggbuygsfbshdgfsbffhkfj because he had had half his teeth knocked out by space ace hey your that zorg so space ace ran while the zorg hobbled after space ace found a secret compartment full of napalm blasters and grabbed one and blasted the zorg in half grannies head came back on and she popped out they scooped out the zorg into the trash and they lived happily ever after until the zorg morphed back together and came back looking for revenge…

The end

Rory Jackson - Little Red Space Ace

Little Red Space Ace

Jimmy threw his bag on. Then he chucked the book on the table and raced off to school. It was 9:30 on Wednesday the 7th of May 2008, and he was 40 minutes late for school.
“Jimmy!” Mr Frantly, Jimmy’s teacher said. “You’re late, again!”
“Sorry, Mr Frantly.” Jimmy replied, while putting his bag on the hook that was free in the back of the room. “But I have a perfectly reasonable explanation.”
“Excuses again!” Mr Frantly yelled. “What is it this time!???!!?!?!?”
“May I use the whiteboard?” Jimmy asked.
“Be quick.” Mr Frantly sighed.
“Okay.” Jimmy started. “This morning I was reading a book to my little brother that made me late to school. This is the story of Little Red Space Ace.”
“Little Red Space Ace
Once upon a time on the 84th of Jancember, 2050, an alien called Space Ace, who was little and red and lived on planet Kleemtos, was bringing a ritual colt to her grandma’s house to sacrifice her into a giant space volcano. She had some human blood soup to give her as well, because it made her body invincible to the pain of up to 66613666 degrees.
“Be careful!” her mother told her. “And don’t talk to strangers again! It cost me a 478953413865784678634786134723478976789137891238902
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Glorkaxian dollar bribe to get you back!”
“Sorry, mum.” Space Ace replied while leaving.
She stole a courier delivery flying saucer, and her and the colt were off. Her grandma lived on planet Mylin, which was 2 Earth hours away. Halfway there they realised that they were going the wrong way. So they turned back. Then when they were going the right way and they were halfway there, a blue blob saw them. Then, with his super scanning vision, he scanned the ship so he knew about grandma, Space Ace and the colt. He also found that they were edible! He was quite hungry then. So he went to their ship and Space Ace wound down the window.
“Can I have you deliver something for me?” the blob asked.
“We aren’t actually deliverers for this company, but okay.” Space Ace replied. “Where to?”
“That worm hole over there.” it said, pointing to a wormhole.
“Let’s go, fellas!” Space Ace said to the colt. Then they left.
“Now my plan shall commence!” the blob screamed. “Muahahahahaaa!!!!!! Muahahahahaaa!!!!!! Muahaha *cough* *cough*”
Then he warped to grandma’s house. The blob knocked on the door.
“I like grapes.” Grandma said as she went to open the door. When she did, she screamed. Not because she saw the blob, but because she farted. Then the blob zapped her with a laser beam that sent her to a different dimension. The blob went into the lounge and looked at a picture of her and transformed into what the picture looked like. But he didn’t know that it was from 867 years ago! Then Space Ace came in with the colt.
“Grandma?” Space Ace yelled out at the top of her lungs.
“I’m in here!” the blob said as it got into grandma’s bed.
“Grandma!” Space Ace screamed. “What great aging cream you have! You look 867 years younger!”
“All the better to stay young with!” the blob replied.
“What great shampoo you have!” Space Ace screamed.
“It’s L’Oreal!” the blob replied. “Because I’m worth it!”
“What tiny eyes you have!” Space Ace screamed
“All the better to be blind with!” the blob replied.
“What a big mouth you have!” Space Ace screamed.
“All the better to eat you with!” the blob screamed as it lunged at Space Ace, with it’s mouth hanging open.
“You can’t eat me!” Space Ace yelled. “You have to drink this human blood soup to get you ready to be sacrificed.”
“Sacrificed?” the blob thought. Then the colt came in, knocked it out and started pounding it to tenderise it for the space gods. Then they warped to the volcano. The colt started chanting some alien gibberish.
“Kamalala Faposimo Shishimashi MALOMALO!!! Kamalala Faposimo Shishimashi MALOMALO!!!”
Then the blob rose into the air and was thrown in the volcano by an invisible force. But just as the blob was about to fall in the space lava, grandma jumped out and got to the top of the volcano.
“Space Ace,” Grandma said. “I don’t want to be sacrificed anymore. I changed my mind.”
“K.” Space Ace replied.”
“…And that’s the story of Little Red Space Ace.” Jimmy finished. But then he noticed that noone was in the room. It was 5 o’clock! The bell rang 2 hours ago!

Ashley Ryder 1st Draft

Object: Rusty Knife
Setting: London Tower
Character: War Hero
Topic: Ghost's Wedding

Once upon a time there lived a war hero one day he went to the tower of London oh did I tell you he is a ghost and he has full in love again he is going to marry a rust knife why a rust knife because when he died he had a rust knife in his hand. When went to war he did not have a wife our kids his parents where died so the army beard him since he died close to water he was put to rest there the night he died he comes back to find true love so he has he dose not come back until one night they where sad so they hunted a girl she was not sad. They did not like the girl then one day she died the war hero yelled out HELPME PLEASE one day they played hide and go seek they did not find her
Then they went to the tower of London and she was there the end
By Ashley

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