Wednesday, May 28, 2008

The Brown Parcel - Sammy Irvine


The Brown Parcel

Once there was a creepy reporter called Ralph. One day Ralph saw a brown parcel lying on the footpath. He picked it up, then he noticed a wide open door. He tiptoed inside and down a long windy staircase made of cold hard stone. When he got down he saw a hot flaming fire and a bookcase. Nobody was down there, he put down the brown parcel, then accidentally stepped on a copper coloured stone. The bookcase shifted aside and a long passage seemed to be behind. Ralph picked up the parcel and hurried inside. The passage wasn’t as long as Ralph thought, it took about three meters and Ralph was at a rugged looking mountain pass, he thought to himself, how did I get here? ‘of course, the secret passage!.’ All of a sudden, a strong wind blew and knocked the parcel out of Ralph’s hands ‘Nooo!’ he screamed, as he staggered up the mountain pass, wind blowing in his face, he saw the parcel lying on a nearby rock, not to far down. He thought he could reach it, but lost his balance and tumbled down the mountain and that was the end of Ralph, the creepy reporter.

6 comments:

Anonymous said...

reelly good but what did he see ashley

Anonymous said...

nice story I liked how the reporter went thought the secret passage and ended up on a mountain side

Anonymous said...

good story and good gramer

Anonymous said...

I liked your story i thought it was funny it was all so funny when he fell down the mountain i also thought it could have been a bit longer

Anonymous said...

it was a good story no words where spelt wrong it was well written 9 out of 10

Anonymous said...

That was a pretty cool story. It was kind of weird when the passage went to a mountain.